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This Song Stinks (Redraw) by Kathalia This Song Stinks (Redraw) by Kathalia
Trying out a project this year to redraw one of my older pictures a month to update the terrible older attempt with a new take.  For February, the poll selected This Song Stinks by Kathalia.  My goal, in both pictures, was to try and capture a punk rock aesthetic for the character, a rebellious musician who angers a magic-weilding rival.  My thoughts on the finished piece are somewhat mixed.  I think that technically the lineart and colouring are better, but it seems to lack some of the rough energy that I really liked in the original.  What do you think?  Let me know in the comments!
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:iconalftheotter:
This version is much better than the old one in many regards. The coloring is much cleaner, the lines are smoother, and in general it is much more detailed than the other version. Her muzzle looks much better as well, it doesn't look stubby or distorted the way it did in the original version.

I especially liked the detail in the clothes. There are plenty of tears, rips, and such which look much more realistic here than in the old version. Her feet also look very good. For whatever reason they seem rather detailed, and they catch the eye a bit.

The only thing I think could be a bit better would be the tail. It looks a bit too sleek and not fluffy enough.

(Suppose some viewers would also prefer a bustier skunk too. XD)
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:iconeduartboudewijn:
This redraw shows a lot of your improvement over the years since you drew the original. Obviously your anatomy has improved a lot as well as your colouring and general presentation of the image. The small updates to the girl's design work very well and the changes in her posing make her look a bit more cute, which work well in alignment with the transformation.

I think you still have a lot of improvement to gain with your hands and feet, although these are obviously the main bane of any artist's existence. Currently your character does seem to lean a bit too much to the left from our viewer's perspective. Try to find and correct these kind of balance issues during the sketching stage by flipping your drawing to get a new look at your placement of the body.

I like that you're working on drawing more elaborate backgrounds, compared to the two colors of the original. Do keep in mind that shadows tend to change their angles based on the angle of the surface they fall upon. Specifically in this piece the shadow you placed doesn't seem to change in it's direction when it hits the wall, compared to the floor. Little things like that can help to make your background feel more three dimensional.

In conclusion, this is a really nice redraw of an interesting idea. This image very much showcases your improvement since 2011. Be sure to keep improving in this way, hopefully this critique will help you along the way. Above all I hope you'll keep enjoying the process of drawing!
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oldiblogg Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2017
The redraw was definitely a good idea. Excellent job!
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Kathalia Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks.  Still need to fine tune some things in future drawings.  Trying to hold my stuff going forward to a higher standard.
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BigMac1212 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2017  Hobbyist Photographer
Great picture, but the title reminds me of the MST3k phrase "IT STINKS!"  ^^;
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Kathalia Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very true.  Or Jay Sherman.
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dod424 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2017
I think the leanness and frazzled hair sold the first drawing. I preferred the lower tailed, and the way she held her guitar that showed off more of the TF. Also while maybe not realistic, i also prefer the contrast of black and white the original had, (Which is the reason i see that people come to see this kind of work.)

No offense though this is mechanically better in plenty of ways, better background, better leg stance, more signs of shock,( but that means less of that punkish energy.) I think with a punkish style, it can be rough and work. Good job though, i couldn't draw to save my life, but i wanted to be honest with my appraisal of this piece.
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Kathalia Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I appreciate the feedback.  I agree that original had some good points, like the stark colours and a more energetic posing that I think work a little better than the new version, which is a little too muted in both respects. 
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dod424 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2017
thanks for taking criticism well, and responding to the comment section, i shall continue to watch your work.
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Kathalia Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Glad to hear it!  Feedback is always welcome!
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Doomreaver3 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Here's a funny: I responded on the FA version of this, stating I preferred the newer version.  My one exception was the leg stance!  It's probably just a personal pet peeve, but the whole "tip-toes knees in" pose makes me face-palm every time.
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Kathalia Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yeah, that pose is something I've been trying to work away from, something of an unconscious fallback.  Will make sure to be more active in making the poses more interesting going forward!
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